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Copy tip: Surprise! This can make or break your campaign
Copywriting tactic | Direct Marketing | Direct Marketing Update
There’s no doubt that direct response copy is the most important element of every campaign…but direct response design is not far behind.
The power of your words can be dramatically affected by their visual appearance. Even the strongest headline can lose impact if it’s not broken correctly.
Each line should be a complete phrase—its own little thought capsule.
Here are some examples that show you how to fix headlines according to direct response principles:
Wrong:
How to make 1,200% profits in
an economy gone mad
Right:
How to make 1,200% profits
in an economy gone mad
Wrong:
Repair years of heart disease in just
five minutes!
Right:
Repair years of heart disease
in just 5 minutes!
For more examples of effective headline breaks, take a look at these two direct mail pieces I created for clients. Note how the breaks affect the impact:
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